Te Tahi Draft 1

 

           Simile                            Metaphor                          Ono                           Personification

The salt water was as cold as a freezer .	The cry of the seagull overhead.	Over and over again the waves kept crashing over.	The wind whispered in my ear.
The foam was as bubbly as a spa.	The crunch of my feet on my sand.	The driftwood crashing against the rocks.	The sunlight flashed  down on me like a ray of light.
A wave from the ocean rose up like an arm reaching for the shore.	The shadows hiding under the dark clouds.	The thunder of the  waves frightened me	The seagull danced across the sky

Today we went to the beach and the wind was really strong so strong that it whispered in my ear. A few minutes later I went towards the salt water and the smell was getting stronger and eventually I got further in the water and the water was as freezing as a freezer and I could stand it so I hopped out and enjoyed the scenery while walking on the sand. The crunch of the sand on my feet was really nice with the sunlight flashing down on me like a ray of light. Later I got tired so I started walking back and I heard a really loud sound so I turned around and I saw a wave from the ocean rise up like an arm reaching for the shore and after the wave there were heaps of driftwood crashing against the rocks. But after that wave hell became real over and over again the waves kept  crashing over the thunder of the waves frightened me so much that I 

Ran back to my car and all you could see was the seagulls dancing in a circle across the sky above my car. The clouds were closing in and the shadows were hiding under them then the

This is my first draft I am lerning to use similes metaphors onomatopeioas and personification